The following video is a montage of all the video feedback we got from peers and adults:
The following is the written feedback we got from peers and adults:
Is the genre clear?
It is a thriller
It is a crime thriller
It is a thriller
It is an action
It is a thriller/action
Who would you say is the main character?
Drea, the girl
The girl
The girl
Drea's character
Drea Bunce
Did the music fit the chosen genre?
Very good, well timed to the clips
Really well
Yes
Yes, it builds up as the opening scene progresses
Yes, the music built tension throughout the piece, it fitted very well
What was the most memorable part?
The penultimate bit where Max speaks
When the girl is cornered at the wall
The running scene
The final line before the screen cuts to black
The shot from across the station (the above shot) it looked very professional, also the ‘hacker’ title
What part could we potentially improve?
The boys should wear jackets
I don't know why they would just wear shirts and trousers and no jackets
The Starbucks scene should be shorter
Have the music build up more gradually before Drea breaks into a run
The beginning seemed a little weird that
Richard and Max were sitting very close to Drea
If this film was to be released, would you go and see it in the cinema?
Yes
Yes
Yes
I'm not sure, it would depend on the plot of the film
Yes, it looks quite like a ‘James Bond-esque’
film and who would say no that one huh?
Out of 60, what mark would you give it?
55
52
58
48
An 'excellent'
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Hacker
Questions for peers/teachers for feedback
Questions
to ask peers/teachers for interview feedback:
Who would you say is the
main character?
Did the music fit the
chosen genre?
What was the most memorable
part?
What part could we
potentially improve?
If this film was to be released,
would you go and see it in the cinema?
These are the grade boundaries (show them)
Out of 60, what mark would you give it?
Level 4 48-60 Excellent
Level 3 36-47 Proficient
Level 2 24-35 Basic
Location and recce shots
Piccadilly Circus: This is where we will film most part of our film opening. The busy vibe adds to the tension of the chase, will they find her through the crowd or lose her again?
London Liverpool Street: This is where the agents will first spot the hacker and tell their boss they have 'eyes' on her. Again, the busy natural vibe of the station will add to the tension.
Starbucks: This is where the audience will see the hacker stealing the government files on her laptop. The coffee shop is symbollic (a lot of people know this place) and is a popular place where she can fit in among the crowds.
The alleyway: This is where the final scene will be shot. The agents will corner the hacker down the alleyway and she will speak into her head piece for back up. The alleyway is effective because it is quite thin and closed in, so it makes their first face to face meet personal and helps the tension build up for the cliffhanger.
Evidence of how planned opening fits with research into genre, codes and conventions
Our film opening will mainly feature a chase through London, as the 'agents' are trying to catch the 'hacker.'
Other stereotypical spy action features are:
Violent action against the rival
Investigating various events on a global scale
Exciting escapism
Heavy action
Stylized fights
Technological thrills
Exotic locales
Frequent shootouts
Car chases
Films with the genre similar to ours:
Other stereotypical spy action features are:
Violent action against the rival
Investigating various events on a global scale
Exciting escapism
Heavy action
Stylized fights
Technological thrills
Exotic locales
Frequent shootouts
Car chases
Films with the genre similar to ours:
The Bourne Identity: a man is picked up by a fishing boat, bullet-riddled and without memory, then races to elude assassins and recover from amnesia.
Die Hard: John McClane, officer of the NYPD, tries to save wife Holly Gennaro and several others, taken hostage by German terrorist Hans Gruber during a Christmas party at the Nakatomi Plaza in Los Angeles.
Shutter Island: drama set in 1954, U.S. Marshal Teddy Daniels is investigating the disappearance of a murderess who escaped from a hospital for the criminally insane and is presumed to be hiding nearby.
Taken: a retired CIA agent travels across Europe and relies on his old skills to save his estranged daughter, who has been kidnapped while on a trip to Paris.
Matrix: a computer hacker learns from mysterious rebels about the true nature of his reality and his role in the war against its controllers.
Inception: a skilled extractor is offered a chance to regain his old life as payment for a task considered to be impossible.
Mission Impossible III: Ethan Hunt comes face to face with a dangerous and sadistic arms dealer while trying to keep his identity secret in order to protect his girlfriend.
Salt: a CIA agent goes on the run after a defector accuses her of being a Russian spy.
Class and teacher feedback
Our average score from class feedback was 47/60, which is a high
level 3, proficient.
The following questions are what our peers were asked, and here
are some of the generic answers:
Is it obviously an opening sequence? Is it clear who the target audience
is?
Most were
unsure who our audience were. Most said it was clear it was an opening sequence
and that leaving it on a cliff hanger was good because it created tension.
Titles go with genre. Is the genre obvious? Are they clear? Are
there enough and are they in the right order?
Most
identified the genre as being a spy action film, but some were unclear. Some
said that the titles were good but most said that they were not effective and
sometimes hard to see, also that they did not fit the genre. This is definitely
something we will change.
Think about sound and the images, are they appropriate? Do they go
together?
Mostly all
said the sound was good and helped build the tension, however a few said the
voiceovers were out of sync, which is something we will adjust.
Camera – are the shots appropriate and relevant? Is there
controlled use of camera attention to framing, variety of shot distance and
angle? Close attention use of mise en scene?
Mostly all
said that there was a good variety of angles and shots. One said the zoom made
it look unprofessional, which is something we will consider when finishing our
final draft.
Editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer and making
selective and appropriate use of shot transitions and other effects.
Mostly all
said the editing and transitions were good and made the sequence flow well.
Any other comments: the titles were sometimes difficult to read.
Teacher’s feedback:
The teachers
said that the titles do not fit the genre, and that the ‘spooky’ shadow behind
emphasises that. We are going to re-do the titles. There are 3 shots (we know
which ones) that either need to be cut better or have the music build up
before, which we will also change. ‘Apart from that, everything else was
brilliant.’
Character profiles and film poster
This is our AS Media chat show on Max and Richard's character profiles.
This is our AS Media chat show on Drea's character profile.
Hacker: first draft
This is the first draft of our film: Hacker.
When we showed our final first draft to the teacher and some peers we got the following feedback:
We learnt that we might need to slow the second half of the music down.
We also learnt we need to put our institution logo in.
We also need to perhaps edit the colouring of the sequence to make it a bit more greeny or yellow. However, we got really positive feedback; a lot of people liked the music and were impressed with the sequence in general.
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